Descriptive Piece Winter

For writing this week we had to do a descriptive piece using a photo so here is my writing and the photo we were doing our descriptive piece on.

The fire is burning bright keeping the whole house warm. The Man is sitting on his chair reading a nice book. While other kids are playing with the snow and going snowboarding. The trees are whistling with the snow. The noise of the wind blowing blocks out all other noises. The clouds block out all of the sun. The snow is so big that you go down to your hips when in the snow like getting in a pool. The snowflakes are sparkling. 

and here is the picture

Liam O Descriptive Writing

For writing this week we have been working on using descriptive writing to interest our readers, Mrs Clark gave us this picture and instructions to make it more interesting for our reader and then we used these words to make a story for this photo. After we had written the story we then self assessed and looked at the descriptive words we used. I really liked this activity because it made me better at spelling! Next time I would like to include more writing and have a word on every box on the 4-5 table.

WALT:  Use precise adjectives in our writing to add interest to our readers

Adjectives	Nouns	Verbs	Adverbs
Broken	Beach	Crashing	Loudly
Destroyed	Ship	Cloudy	Ear piercing
Abandoned	Wood	Waves	Sitting
sinking			Aboundound

This is a abandoned ship its broken a better word is destroyed its sitting and sinking the the waves are blowing its cloudy and crashing and the sound its making when its crashing its ear piercing.